It's an excerpt, so the style might fit better in the book, where hopefully the reader isn't thrown right into it and bombarded with it constantly.
Even as an excerpted article, however, it needed to be edited much more. I skimmed the last half because I found the style unbearable. If you're going to explain why movies suck now, then start talking about facts, ideas, and their connections. Why bother with so much character development when those characters don't matter in such a short piece?
Even as an excerpted article, however, it needed to be edited much more. I skimmed the last half because I found the style unbearable. If you're going to explain why movies suck now, then start talking about facts, ideas, and their connections. Why bother with so much character development when those characters don't matter in such a short piece?