> Sounds like it’s not your cup of tea, but I wonder what prompts you to leave this negative comment?
The hackneyed gerund-noun title is reason enough. Seriously, the writing is coming from someone who wants to be a writer as opposed to just being one: the contrived cadence, the awkward diction, the constant minutiae...
> Do you think the author will read it and change his style?
Hopefully.
> And, what do you think about the actual matter subject of the post rather than the style?
It's a terribly cliched type of travel essay: "This city is absurd, but there's beauty in places."
> the writing is coming from someone who wants to be a writer as opposed to just being one
Mod has made a living writing, creating books, and taking photographs for many years. I'd say that makes him a writer, not a wannabe writer. You have critiqued his style, and that's fine. You don't like it, but your stylistic preferences don't govern who deserves to be considered a writer.
Would you mind sharing an example of writing that is in your preferred style?
>But you learn. You learn to navigate the shameful ATMs, and you learn, quickly, routes between places that avoid the crowds. You learn the Biennale is Good. And you find a talented shiatsu specialist named Lorenzo who communicates only via Google Translate.
Isn't that style meant to be read ironically? The general 'you' cannot learn about the shiatsu specialist named Lorenzo.
The hackneyed gerund-noun title is reason enough. Seriously, the writing is coming from someone who wants to be a writer as opposed to just being one: the contrived cadence, the awkward diction, the constant minutiae...
> Do you think the author will read it and change his style?
Hopefully.
> And, what do you think about the actual matter subject of the post rather than the style?
It's a terribly cliched type of travel essay: "This city is absurd, but there's beauty in places."