Overall I like it, good music pick, pretty decent pace, but the editing and cuts lead to a fractured feeling.

* "Meet Nudge Rewards" can cut to the iphone screen, but it'd be nice to throw in a zoom onto your logo there, as "Meet" seems like a verb where you wanna introduce your branding quite prominently. If the logo zoom situation ain't great, I'd use a shot of tapping on the icon and cut out after a second or two of showing the app's loading screen just to get more visible branding.

• Instead of animating each new word in, use that animation for emphasis. It's jarring as is, and hard to read, and definitely contributes to the sense of the video being fractured.

• I'd combine the "facitilate conversation and collaboration" with "In real time", and letting that demo run unbroken.

Thanks a lot @andkon...that's some terrific insight; my weakest area is storytelling and with my next video I'm hoping to round off all of the corners to showcase the branding quite prominently and making the video easier to digest.

Way to much going on, too much text in the screenshots so I try to read it but then it's gone.

The text doesn't pop with the beat, nothing big bug kinda odd feeling imo.

At the end I don't really get what the app is about, some news thing within the company. And/or some performance tracking for each employee.

And the iOS wallpaper is like iOS 8 style.

As a whole, I think you have the style and feel down pretty well (not very original though) you just need to simplify it a bit.

Thanks for sharing, I also want to make such videos, so I have watched the whole video, and feel that it's too fast comparing to those videos I watch before. Too many texts for audience to read, and they are so small.

More important, I do not get any key idea from the video. Maybe I am not the expected audience of the product.

Congrats! I know how much work this whole process is when you have never done it before. I'd recommend looking into doing your animations manually rather than a screen recording to get rid of the magnifying glass "finger" thing